BiQ wrote:Then I looked elsewhere and noticed her arm. Now, I know (or have understood) that you are making artistic point in your style of steering away from the anorectic style of Sadamoto (and most other evangelion fanartists+doujinkas) and I respect that choice. I really do. However, I think... you are sometimes overdoing it a bit, especially when it comes to the way you draw arms. It's not too bad, but I still felt I want to mention it. I still like that picture very much, though. That face...
If I may, I'd like to give my own critique of this image, since it's very direct and easy to read. Certainly no offense is intended here: I'm trying to help.
There are three things that stand out as far as critiques of this particular image: 1. Asuka's left wrist, 2. the ears, and 3. Shinji's shoulders. First off, her wrist is too thick, and if you examine how far you can bend your entire palm away from your thumb, you'll see that position would be nearly impossible to hold for more than a second unless your hand was broken.
The way you draw ears still bothers me a bit; as someone else said earlier, they look too flat. Feel the inside of your ear: there's really two parts of it. There's an interior "cup" which channels sound, and the outer rim which encircles the edge of that cupped portion. The cup is much deeper than the rim, and in a lot of art, is shaded much darker because it's often in shadow.
Finally, the shoulders look fairly boneless. Humans are pointy creatures; we've got hard bone close to the surface at almost every joint. Males, especially, show this, and females do in the hips, if they're even a bit skinny. The problem with trying to soften the body contours at every angle is you end up often with a "doughy" person who doesn't appear to have any bones. Most of your figures suffer from varying amounts of this problem, and it isn't something that is unlearned quickly. Practice drawing from photos and from real life; there's no subsitute for the real thing, even if it's yourself.
You certainly put a lot of emotion into your art, and you're very obviously a deep Eva fan, GC. I want to see you do well, even better than you're doing now. And that will come with time and effort. You're closing in on a really attractive style... it's almost there. It just needs a bit of polish and some elbow grease. Believe me, I know how hard comics are, and how tough the human form is. I suffered through four years of drawing both endlessly in college. So keep at it.
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