Nonconstructive criticism welcome. This is my first Typography class.
Movie slides for Typography class. [Evangelion related]
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Movie slides for Typography class. [Evangelion related]
My Typography teacher assigned us a project where we have to create an opening sequence for a movie.
Nonconstructive criticism welcome. This is my first Typography class.
Nonconstructive criticism welcome. This is my first Typography class.
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I´m just a layman too, but having watched a lot of horrible commercials and being a master in nit-picking, I should be able to give *some* advice.
First row:
Firstly, the first and last picture look kinda stuffed.
Maybe use short and striking words instead of whole sentences?
In the third picture, that little eva in the left bottom is too small.
You should generally make the Eva´s BIGGER, you don´t even have to show the whole thing for a much greater effect.
Centralize the goddamn mechs, don´t put them on the sides, they should pop into the viewer´s face like a brick through your window.
And that cross font in the first picture is just bugging me.
Second row:
Again, there´s too much going on in the first picture at the same time.
The font in the second picture is far too big and there is far too much going on.
But I like the fact that you matched the colors with Unit-03 and the dawning sun it stands on.
Last but not least, the fourth picture.
Maybe you should make "The First Angel" a little more bigger and a little more flashier so that people can distinguish it between the "Kaworu knows adam know Kaworu very well"
That is of course just my opinion, but what else am I supposed to post instead?
First row:
Firstly, the first and last picture look kinda stuffed.
Maybe use short and striking words instead of whole sentences?
In the third picture, that little eva in the left bottom is too small.
You should generally make the Eva´s BIGGER, you don´t even have to show the whole thing for a much greater effect.
Centralize the goddamn mechs, don´t put them on the sides, they should pop into the viewer´s face like a brick through your window.
And that cross font in the first picture is just bugging me.
Second row:
Again, there´s too much going on in the first picture at the same time.
The font in the second picture is far too big and there is far too much going on.
But I like the fact that you matched the colors with Unit-03 and the dawning sun it stands on.
Last but not least, the fourth picture.
Maybe you should make "The First Angel" a little more bigger and a little more flashier so that people can distinguish it between the "Kaworu knows adam know Kaworu very well"
That is of course just my opinion, but what else am I supposed to post instead?
InstrumentalityOne wrote:SPOILER: ShowI´m just a layman too, but having watched a lot of horrible commercials and being a master in nit-picking, I should be able to give *some* advice.
First row:
Firstly, the first and last picture look kinda stuffed.
Maybe use short and striking words instead of whole sentences?
In the third picture, that little eva in the left bottom is too small.
You should generally make the Eva´s BIGGER, you don´t even have to show the whole thing for a much greater effect.
Centralize the goddamn mechs, don´t put them on the sides, they should pop into the viewer´s face like a brick through your window.
And that cross font in the first picture is just bugging me.
Second row:
Again, there´s too much going on in the first picture at the same time.
The font in the second picture is far too big and there is far too much going on.
But I like the fact that you matched the colors with Unit-03 and the dawning sun it stands on.
Last but not least, the fourth picture.
Maybe you should make "The First Angel" a little more bigger and a little more flashier so that people can distinguish it between the "Kaworu knows adam know Kaworu very well"
That is of course just my opinion, but what else am I supposed to post instead?
Thank you for the response. I do realize they seem too wordy and what not but I am supposed to make it type centered; there wasn't even supposed to be images. I had thought short words or phrases would be too little, but that's just me. Yes, 05 is small, not sure what I was thinking. I didn't centralize them because I wanted variation, but I do agree that the centralized ones look the best to me (02 and 03). Personally, I really like the Lilith one because I was trying to portray the significance of Lilith. Did you find anything wrong with it? You never mentioned it.
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These look decent to me, though they look like they would be more at home as the opening for something like an animated series then a movie. Kinda reminds me of cowboy bebops opening.
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Some general suggestions:
Make the shading of the background consistent to tie it all together even as everything else changes... like always darker on the sides. Also, take that into consideration for your text, as some of it is pretty much unreadable because of the shading. Put it in a higher level?
I don't care much for the font (ragged edges at large size, eew), but it would probably be a good idea to use 2-3 fonts in total for different 'levels' of text. Maybe all from the same family, just light, black, normal? more contrast is a good thing.
The occasionally backwards/upside down text isn't my thing but it's isn't terrible... but it is pretty bad when you change direction in the middle of a line, such as the unit 02 text.
Make the shading of the background consistent to tie it all together even as everything else changes... like always darker on the sides. Also, take that into consideration for your text, as some of it is pretty much unreadable because of the shading. Put it in a higher level?
I don't care much for the font (ragged edges at large size, eew), but it would probably be a good idea to use 2-3 fonts in total for different 'levels' of text. Maybe all from the same family, just light, black, normal? more contrast is a good thing.
The occasionally backwards/upside down text isn't my thing but it's isn't terrible... but it is pretty bad when you change direction in the middle of a line, such as the unit 02 text.
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NemZ wrote:Some general suggestions:
Make the shading of the background consistent to tie it all together even as everything else changes... like always darker on the sides. Also, take that into consideration for your text, as some of it is pretty much unreadable because of the shading. Put it in a higher level?
I don't care much for the font (ragged edges at large size, eew), but it would probably be a good idea to use 2-3 fonts in total for different 'levels' of text. Maybe all from the same family, just light, black, normal? more contrast is a good thing.
The occasionally backwards/upside down text isn't my thing but it's isn't terrible... but it is pretty bad when you change direction in the middle of a line, such as the unit 02 text.
I wasn't intending to make the text readable, just into a design. the focus was supposed to be on the staff and what not. if it wasn't typography class I'd make it less text centered lol
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Oh man, it's getting all Persona up in here!
Seriously though; from an aesthetic perspective I think the slides are well-designed, but they don't really seem to match the atmosphere of the movie. Evangelion is very stylish, but it's also very moody. These feel too clean and sterile; they need more MOOD. And not just any mood; Eva's mood. I'll leave it up to you to determine what exactly that is; sorry I can't be more specific, but I too am a layman.
Seriously though; from an aesthetic perspective I think the slides are well-designed, but they don't really seem to match the atmosphere of the movie. Evangelion is very stylish, but it's also very moody. These feel too clean and sterile; they need more MOOD. And not just any mood; Eva's mood. I'll leave it up to you to determine what exactly that is; sorry I can't be more specific, but I too am a layman.
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gatotsu911 wrote:Oh man, it's getting all Persona up in here!
Seriously though; from an aesthetic perspective I think the slides are well-designed, but they don't really seem to match the atmosphere of the movie. Evangelion is very stylish, but it's also very moody. These feel too clean and sterile; they need more MOOD. And not just any mood; Eva's mood. I'll leave it up to you to determine what exactly that is; sorry I can't be more specific, but I too am a layman.
Arigato. I plan on making new ones.
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