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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 1:34 am

without a doubt, she'll see regular Rei at one point in the tale :nod:

(Most likely via a dream, though)
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Postby Ryjin » Fri Jan 08, 2010 1:55 am

Of course you can always give the fans what they really want to see! And no I don't mean hawt Mari on Rei action!

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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 1:58 am

Ryjin wrote:And no I don't mean hawt Mari on Rei action!

I figured someone would look at the friendship between Rei and Mari and think of it being somewhat homoerotic sooner or later (Just kidding :toothy: )

now..that goofy fight seems more likely for the RP than the fanfic, so it will happen one way or another :kawaii:



speaking of Mari, I wonder what you think of my take on her?
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Postby Ryjin » Fri Jan 08, 2010 2:06 am

So far so good and I'm liking the added detail of her having a thing for Kenske, poor kid almost never gets any love. I also think it's a good thing that you kinda eased up on the her British slang, doing accents and foreign slag is a really tricky line to walk especially if you don't have any real personal experience with the culture.
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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 2:14 am

I would like to have her toss out as much british slag as I could, but finding good moments to squeeze in the slag words is hard, especially since a lot of the words I think would have a british slang versions don't


now...with that said, i'll be flat out pissed if her english dub actor doesn't give her a british accent (It's highly possible, but whatever)
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Postby Ryjin » Fri Jan 08, 2010 2:32 am

Come now, the American dub actor is a lessor breed of creature; one should not try to expect to much of them for they are simple breed limited in both capacity AND intelligence, kinda of like a politician, cheerleader or a CEO.
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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 3:54 am

just caught a few typos I made in Chapter 5, so I immediately fixed them before anyone can notice :)
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Postby Ryjin » Fri Jan 08, 2010 11:15 am

:thumbsup: given as I'm an atrocious speller I do tend to miss those too.
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Mari makes me hard. :shinji_blush:
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Postby Ryjin » Fri Jan 08, 2010 3:18 pm

Oh course a little verity never hurt nobody :thumbsup:
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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 4:54 pm

Might wait a little longer before I start on Chapter 6


since I posted Chapter 5, I researched some of the extracannonical things and have gotten some great, yet screwed-up ideas, especially a subplot involving three newcoming Nerv technicians

once that and the Iruel sequence show up, its back to being an M-rated FanFic on FanFiction.net
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Postby Ryjin » Fri Jan 08, 2010 5:35 pm

:angry:
Angry smiley does not find your excuses amusing........
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Postby DevRei17 » Fri Jan 08, 2010 7:26 pm

I just realized your Rei has a bit of a foul mouth.:lol:
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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 7:37 pm

the sad and funny thing is that with the massive (for the most part) changes I made to Rei, it may make Shinji look more pathetic than he already is and Asuka even bitchier and more unlikeable than before :tongue:
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Postby DevRei17 » Fri Jan 08, 2010 7:46 pm

GasmaskAvenger wrote:the sad and funny thing is that with the massive (for the most part) changes I made to Rei, it may make Shinji look more pathetic than he already is and Asuka even bitchier and more unlikeable than before :tongue:

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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 7:48 pm

Just wait and see ;)


once I get my next part of the RP out of the way, the typing of Chapter 6 will commence
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Postby Ryjin » Fri Jan 08, 2010 8:10 pm

Wait! Asuka's not a Bitch! She's just........ chronically bitchy, that's it!
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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 10:36 pm

a doujinshi adaption would be as cool (though I refuse for anyone to add sex scenes in it if that happens)
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Postby Ryjin » Fri Jan 08, 2010 10:52 pm

You know it's not a requirement by law that all doujinshi have to be porno's....... wait a minute, what's this? According to Section II a) paragraph 4 of HR369 Doujinshi Regulations Act of 2007 all doujinshi must, "Have a bear minimum of no less then 4 pages of characters either male or female depicted in the nude or in the act of sex or engaging in the act of sodomy or the act of fallatio." Damn, looks like you're SOL man!
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Postby GasmaskAvenger » Fri Jan 08, 2010 10:59 pm

:lol:


so if a doujinshi doesn't need to be pornographic in nature, then great


though this tale is a long way from being truly finished, because even after I complete it, it needs massive proofreading, cleaning up and such, thanks to another person on another forum
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