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Postby KobayashiRiku » Sat Sep 26, 2015 8:06 pm

I'm currently writing an Evangelion fiction in which I'd like to pair these two up, and I know quite a few of you are fanfiction writers. Its not the main pair of the story but I was looking for some advice on how to craft a believable relationship between these two. Any serious advice would be greatly appreciated :emogendo:

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Postby Mr. Tines » Sun Sep 27, 2015 3:35 am

If you haven't seen the alternate live action sequence for EoE, go do that now.

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Now we're back, consider that Touji is the series jock/bad boy with a heart of gold. The relationship just writes itself.
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Postby SEELE » Sun Sep 27, 2015 3:55 am

View Original PostKobayashiRiku wrote:I'm currently writing an Evangelion fiction in which I'd like to pair these two up[...]


You are implying that you don't go for the underdeveloped Hikari-route. :shinji_boohoo:

Hikari and Toji are a good tagteam. :hikari_happy: :toji_sulk:

Just like :kensuke_drool: :marihearts:

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But if this is for real, please post a link when you published it. And an advice would be that you use Episode 8 elevator scene and the peeping tom stuff. The rebuild heavly implies that Toji likes traditional women - which brings us back to Hikari. But it is the teasing that shows affection. Just like with Shinji. And yes, Mr. Tines advice is prob. the best you can get. Because it shows how Asuka turns to the first guy that she was approached by.
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Postby Glor » Sun Sep 27, 2015 8:57 am

^You've already got some good advice from Tines and SEELE, but I'll just drop my two cents here anyway:

You could also go back and take a look at Asuka and Toji's brief interactions during the series to get an idea of what a relationship between them would be like. Asuka is very confrontational and Toji is immensely stubborn and as we see in the show, he'll challenge her when he feels she's being overbearing. I could see these two arguing over stupid, inconsequential stuff all the time. A relationship where they are at each other's throats as much as they are trying to show one another affection would be believable to me.

It also depends on what's going on in the story.
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Postby KobayashiRiku » Sun Sep 27, 2015 8:09 pm

Thanks to the three of you for your advice, I will definitely take it into consideration moving forward.

View Original PostSEELE wrote:You are implying that you don't go for the underdeveloped Hikari-route. :shinji_boohoo:


Its not that I don't per se, I don't mind this pair in fics I read.

View Original PostSEELE wrote:But if this is for real, please post a link when you published it.


Will do, as soon as I finish rewriting it. I need to tune it up some, as it stands now, I feel its not at its full potential. I mean people like it but after some serious review and introspection I feel that a couple of my reviewers are right, I need to work on pacing. (Admittedly when I first outlined it, I had just come off an EVA-binge of all 26 eps EoE and the Rebuilds) I want to get this right, its the first Evangelion fic I've posted.

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Postby NemZ » Sun Sep 27, 2015 9:05 pm

What's sort of funny about that is Toji's habit of not giving in to Asuka's clearly superior ideas is what drives her nuts, but what bugs her even more about Shinji is that he's a doormat. Honestly I think either would do if they would meet the other's attitude halfway... assuming they were 'special' enough to be worth notice like her (or that she didn't consider herself so 'special' so as to justify such haughtiness).
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Postby Squigsquasher » Mon Sep 28, 2015 2:00 pm

Bah! Mediocre! Everybody knows Kensuke X Asuka is where it's at.
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