On Fanfiction.net - On Sufficient Velocity Two years after Instrumentality's end, Shinji comes out of retirement to train a new Eva pilot and thwart Seele's plans for Fourth Impact. Some years ago, I worked on The Coming of the First Ones but never finished it. It was an ambitious, rambling story, ...

That's pure speculation. There is no direct evidence of Angels' states of mind when not in contact with Lilin. Suggesting there is a marked difference between the situations (in contact and not in contact) runs afoul of Occam's razor.

The key feature of chaotic systems is that small deviations in initial conditions lead to large changes in final behavior. It's not like throwing a ball in the air and watching it come down, where if you give it a little more or a little less velocity, the differences in the trajectories will st...

I'm looking for a pre-reader for new chapters of The Coming of the First Ones. My current pre-reader has had less time and availability of late, so I'm hoping for some supplemental feedback and opinions. If anyone is interested, I would very much appreciate it. Thank you.

If you've got a complicated narrative and want to break it out to manageable pieces, I've got a system that helps. Separate out each individual narrative strand into a document and give it a code. Then create the master narrative as a separate file. In the master narrative if you outline, y...

I have to say I think people find Rei so hard to write because there's so little going on outside. So much of her deal is internal reflection stuff that it sort of limits what you can do, and also forces you to do lots of narrative. And then there's the language she uses. Every time I see a...

Quite right. I think the problem is exacerbated if people don't all come back or don't all come back at once. If it's a gradual thing, then not all that infrastructure can be maintained. Some areas can't be serviced and fall into disrepair and disuse, opening those areas up to looting.

Er, yeah. Different, as in larger . A continent blew up, dude. You don't even want to think about the effect that would have on the planet. 3I was nothing by comparison. Yes, it was disruptive since people got moved around and all, but the actual effect on the planet was trivial. Between the re...

I'm thinking of doing a series about Kaji's training and adventures with NERV/SEELE before the events of the series. He'd be doing some serious Bond/Snake-esque globe trotting (since I've always been intrigued by the greater post-second impact world). Maybe it would have Ken...

Rei has trouble understanding her own feelings. Would these externalized thoughts then be her attempts to understand her feelings, just exposed to the world?

I figured that an organisation like SEELE can be very persuasive, but the idea of Hitler turning on SEELE intrigues me. After giving this further thought, I thought of scrapping Nazi Evas, and instead letting them being the creators of the Angels. So with the Angels, do the Nazis really need allies...

This is an interesting piece. I feel Gob had struck a good balance in rehashing events only when necessary (or when there has been sufficient divergence). This is one of the big pitfalls that people can fall into, and for the large part, the issue is handled well. Chapters are short. Sometim...

This got me thinking...what if, during WW2, SEELE sided with the Nazis. Given the religious nature of Instrumentality, SEELE might see the godless Soviet Union as a threat to their plans. The Nazis may not have been completely irreligious, and given that they basically tried to hijack Christianity ...

Madoka basically is the Eva of the magical girl genre, isn't it?

If someone decides to write one (or another one) like that as a fusion, there should be a gag where Kyubey mistakes Shinji for a girl and that's why he offers Shinji a contract.

Random anti-AT field storms reduce anyone caught in them back to tang?

But you did the same thing, save for the fact you forgot to look at the overarching plot that determines how and why Kaworu would come to be at Nerv in the first place. You need to think about cause and effect when looking at a character's role in the story; if you throw shit in there for the h...

You both seem to be missing the whole point of fanfiction. It's about writing whatever you want, not slavishly adhering to canon. More than that, I'm frankly astounded that people would try to boil down two characters into a handful of sentences as has been done here. You can't just gli...

Naked? The one floating over water is most certainly not naked. Are you referring to some other instance?

"No choice" is putting it a bit strong. For all we know, a being outside of time would see the possibility of a paradox as nonsensical, just as it would be impossible to take a length of string and turn it into a loop or a figure-8.

Chuckman#651180 wrote:Why does Giant Naked Rei falling apart mean she's dead? She clearly transcends physical form. We see her doing it.

Sure, I don't discount the possibility. Certainly a being that transcends time could consider death of a physical body rather meaningless.