[Fic] Genocide Extended: Finale December 8th!

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Postby Bagheera » Sun Dec 18, 2011 2:15 pm

View Original PostRommel wrote:Anyway, if anyone want to discuss the finer points I'm open to it. Like I said, I'll probably get around to doing a revision some time soon. And yes, I know I've been talking about a Genocide-based lemon so I may get to that. I had hoped for contributions (especially from a certain Sage) but with the lack of reviews I don't think that will happen.


Genocide lemon? Fuck yeah, sign me up. If Power Plays is any indication that would be some damn fine work (all the moreso if it's also an epilogue, but it would hold even if it's set during the later chapters).
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Postby Chuckman » Sun Dec 18, 2011 3:00 pm

View Original PostRommel wrote:Shinji was tricky in that the ending had to show rather than tell how far he had come. The last scene is an opposite of the first, when he tries to wake her up out of desperation. He doesn't need to do that anymore. He is a grown up now.


This, this, this,a thousand times this. This is the essence of show-not-tell. I love it when a fanfic author includes callbacks to events in canon in a way that comments on them through thematic variation. There were a few other things like this that I enjoyed. I really should re-read the whole thing and post a more detailed review.
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Postby xanderkh » Wed Dec 21, 2011 1:40 am

I'm really sorry I took so long Rommel, but I just posted my review of your story. I wanted to read the story from start to finish before I submitted my review. :toothy:

Anyway, an epilogue would certainly be welcomed! I'd love to see all the characters lives after chapter 15. Like Bahgeera said, I'd love to see how Shinji and Asuka's relationship goes from there, as well as Rei's with both Keiko and Asuka. It would greatly be appreciated. :)
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Postby Rommel » Thu Dec 29, 2011 1:05 pm

View Original PostBagheera wrote:Genocide lemon? Fuck yeah, sign me up. If Power Plays is any indication that would be some damn fine work (all the moreso if it's also an epilogue, but it would hold even if it's set during the later chapters).


It would be in the later chapters, when sex becomes Asuka's way of showing she's grown-up/doing grown-up things.

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Postby FelipeFritschF » Sat Mar 30, 2019 11:35 pm

Forgive me but I don't think it's actually a problem to bump a thread for a fanfic of such quality. Fantastic work, btw.

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Postby Rommel » Thu Apr 04, 2019 7:15 pm

Thanks, mate.

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Postby Ikarus Onesun » Fri Jun 14, 2019 12:11 pm

It's not bad. ;-)

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Postby Rommel » Thu Aug 29, 2019 4:11 pm

Might as well update this. I finished an Epilogue that will be posted as soon as it's proofread. There's also an edited version that's slowly being updated on Ao3 that adds a bit more character stuff on some scenes (up to chapter 6 so far).

https://archiveofourown.org/works/68100 ... s/15549823

I don't know if I've mentioned this before but someone did a TV Tropes pages for Genocide and it's mostly spot on. Thanks to whoever it was.

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Postby JimmyWolk » Fri Aug 30, 2019 9:01 am

Huh, gotta admit, didn't expect the epilogue to still be a thing. Might have to see if I can check by a bit earlier then. ;)

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Postby Rommel » Fri Aug 30, 2019 9:05 am

I shared it just in case you want it.

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Postby JimmyWolk » Fri Aug 30, 2019 9:56 am

Not sure if I'll manage today, but I may check tomorrow.

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Postby Rommel » Thu Sep 05, 2019 12:12 pm

Well, I dun went and did it. The Epilogue has been posted.

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Postby Derantor » Mon Oct 21, 2019 9:53 am

Just finished reading the epilogue. You've found a really good, uncontrived reason for them to be able to live on, and I liked the way you handled their relations without having to explain all the in-between. I wasn't expecting such an ending, but it worked very well, and brought some kind of closure without saying too much.

Now I just have to find a reason for my children not being chipped at the end of my story ...

And yeah, go on writing that lemon, it's not a jarring contrast to the rest of the series. I've read your "Diary", so I look forward to great things to come!
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Postby Rommel » Thu Oct 24, 2019 3:02 pm

View Original PostDerantor wrote:Just finished reading the epilogue. You found've a really good, uncontrived reason for them to be able to live on, and I liked the way you handled their relations without having to explain all the in-between. I wasn't expecting such an ending, but it worked very well, and brought some kind of closure without saying too much.

Now I just have to find a reason for my children not being chipped at the end of my story ...

And yeah, go on writing that lemon, it's not a jarring contrast to the rest of the series. I've read your "Diary", so I look forward to great things to come!


Glad you liked it. Can't make promises on the lemon bit. It would probably be kinda boring given where they are in the story.

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Postby Derantor » Fri Oct 25, 2019 8:25 pm

You are probably right. The next step would logically be the slow death of sex, lending itself to a dark story how everything turns boring eventually. I imagine ever more extravagant but futile attempts to get some of the old feeling back. Huh, I can't help it, somehow I can never imagine a bright future for those two, it eventually feels fake.


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