As Bags knows, a PP sequel has been sitting around my computer for a while. I finally got tired of letting it lay about, doing nothing all day besides eat my food and drink my beer.

So here it is:

http://anime.adult-fanfiction.org/story.php?no=600055178

As always, this is a lemon. Expect naughty business.

Ah, good, progress! I'll have to dig into this tonight.

My one complaint is that Misato really should have included Shinji in this contract business. Made Asuka read the terms aloud to Shinji over the phone perhaps, confirmed that he also agreed to this amendment to the status quo. Not doing so really undermines his position of authority within the dynamic as well as potentially crossing a line for him.

NemZ wrote:My one complaint is that Misato really should have included Shinji in this contract business. Made Asuka read the terms aloud to Shinji over the phone perhaps, confirmed that he also agreed to this amendment to the status quo. Not doing so really undermines his position of authority within the dynamic as well as potentially crossing a line for him.

Something will happen with that when he returns, but she could hardly call him in the middle of the night. It was also somewhat of a spurt of the moment thing.

Rommel wrote:Something will happen with that when he returns, but she could hardly call him in the middle of the night. It was also somewhat of a spurt of the moment thing.

I like it, actually; Misato's relationship with Asuka is a separate affair, and has nothing to do with the latter's relationship with Shinji. Handling them separately is the right way to go. It will be interesting to see how the three interact, but so long as Asuka is being straightforward with both Misato and Shinji I see no reason why she needs permission for either relationship.

Perhaps because there was a stated expectation of exclusive commitment between them save for mutually-involved and consenting circumstances? Or because Asuka made it clear she would not be happy if he strayed while he was gone but apparently has no compunction doing so herself?

Asuka is not being an ethical slut here, and Misato is out of bounds for making such changes to the relationship without considering all involved parties, both as a lover and as their guardian. All these relationships have to be built on trust; indeed that's the whole point, and these actions break that trust. I expect Shinji to be justifiably upset about this when he returns unless he has guilty conscience of his own or unless they keep it secret, and in both cases that's an even bigger problem.

...but that doesn't mean it doesn't make for a compelling story. Fiction needs conflict afterall, and a good story enhances the smut.

I don't know about that. Shinji brought Misato in to the relationship, after all, and what she's doing here is just building on what was already there. If this makes Asuka a more stable, secure person Shinji will only benefit in the end. And of course, it's not like Shinji doesn't know what's going on. The vibe between Misato and Asuka has been there as long as this story has existed, and Shinji's been aware of it for the duration. Now it's just playing out as it should, and Shinji will roll with that just as he has with everything else.

Sure Bags, a BDSM story were people just assume consent and take each other for granted... what could possibly go wrong there?

That . . . doesn't match up with what I said at all. What are you on about?

The same thing I've been on about the whole time. We don't need to talk to Shinji. Shinji probably already knows. Shinji will just roll with it, right? All of that takes him for granted and breaks the trust required of such an arrangement. It changes the dynamic because now he's necessarily going to be the 'lesser master' because Misato has explicit authority over both of them so their relationship will exist at her whims.

Consider this, man: What if he comes home from two weeks of self control and creative fuckery planned out only to find out that his slave has been playing around behind his back and isn't exclusively his anymore? How can he not see that as a betrayal when you know damn well that Shinji is always expecting that to be the case in all his relationships. I'd expect him to immediately quit Nerv and move out (hell, his stuff is already packed and on his back!) because that's how he rolls, and nothing short of an impending apocalypse will change Shinji's mind once he's actually made it.

NemZ wrote:The same thing I've been on about the whole time. We don't need to talk to Shinji. Shinji probably already knows. Shinji will just roll with it, right? All of that takes him for granted and breaks the trust required of such an arrangement. It changes the dynamic because now he's necessarily going to be the 'lesser master' because Misato has explicit authority over both of them so their relationship will exist at her whims.

. . . that was established in the original story, and at his request no less. He is the lesser master, because he doesn't know what the fuck he's doing. He brought Misato in to help save them both, that was the whole point. All Misato's doing here is stabilizing Asuka so that Shinji will have something to work with when he gets back.

Consider this, man: What if he comes home from two weeks of self control and creative fuckery planned out only to find out that his slave has been playing around behind his back and isn't exclusively his anymore?

How do you figure it's behind his back? Did you read the first story? Misato is a fundamental part of their relationship. She's why it works, why it isn't the exploitative train wreck it was at the start of the original story. She and Asuka would have to have some kind of romantic interaction while he's gone, be it sexual or no; it would be odd if they didn't at this point.

Bagheera wrote:Did you read the first story?

It's been a while. I concede I might have forgotten some relevant particulars.

It's never too late to read it again.

I have to say, I seems AFF was taken over by east europeans or something (or someone with really broken english). This thing was getting some strange reviews.

Rommel wrote:I seems AFF was taken over by east europeans or something (or someone with really broken english).

Ahem. I'm Eastern European too. Is my English crap? You've seen it before on Fanbards.

If you are not the one posting ridiculous bullshit in the story's review section, then it's clearly not with you is it?

Rommel wrote:It's never too late to read it again.

I found 3 chapters and an omake. Is that it or am I still missing some of it?

Because from what I read my comments still seem on-point.

Rommel wrote:If you are not the one posting ridiculous bullshit in the story's review section, then it's clearly not with you is it?

Nope. I saw that review and could barely read it. I hate it when people write like that.