EOE's ending is>>>>>>>>>the manga's yeah There is much more chance of a relation in the manga than EoE, where Shinji and Asuka appear to be the only people left on earth. No, they don't. It's explicitly stated anyone can come back. They're the only two in the location because A. they're the first to...

Gob Hobblin#874765 wrote:It's not accidental: his desires and his feelings were 100% true in that moment. The question is whether or not he knew that his feelings in that moment would have actual consequences.

didn't he say "you can all die!" before killing everyone?

This was guten.

I think that's a fair question, given the extremely deteriorated emotional and mental state that he was in at the time. The choice seemed an intentional one which was a direct response to Asuka not willing to help him emotionally. To have it be accedental would just weaken the weight of the scene a...

I probably will. Reading through it again, I'm not really satisfied with that bit, myself. Any thoughts about the most recent scene? Great as usual. I like you going with mr. casual and mr. not causal but here's a way to upgrade that translate it into Japanese using a transaltor and then make it Mr...

But that's a narration bit, it shouldn't be in italics. I mean, sure, I'm talking about Asuka's thoughts in there, but I'm not directly showing them.: Ah okay. Well then let me reframe my advice. Instead of making narration that closely resembles showing someone thinking, just show the person think...

Shinji isn't obligated to be her hero either, less accept her belittling him What a deflection. Maybe If I repeat what I said, you'll try to address it: Shinji is obligated not to kill other people though. Furthermore, you are perfectly entitled to verbally "belittle" whoever the hell you...

No, no, instead you drop the gymnatics mister, she could at least be polite too (we know she can), did I said giving self esteem? No. Asuka isn't obligated to be polite. Shinji is obligated not to kill other people though. Don't place words in my mouth like that, and I did not get what you meant, a...

Weird, I normally do that and the thoughts in this scene appear in italics for me. I've checked it again and cannot find the unmarked thoughts that you're talking about, so do you mind telling me which part you're mentioning just in case I'm being blind? example: No, that was impossible. Ridiculous...

NoAltRealities#874570 wrote:.

There's no way to know how comfortable the two are from the image you're referencing, otherwise, well said.

Did she had a choice? Let's just watch it again, so okay, she did save the world, Shinji and Ayanami did too, regarding kindness, And the rest of the time was spent killing her, trying to kill her again, and masturbating over her comatose body. But hey, he's usually polite, so obviously Asuka's obl...

Again, top bins. Great work, fantastic characterization, and you're getting the exposition down which is making your story very easy to read. Couple of things though: You should probably italicize thoughts. You might want to spend more time describing the location of thse scenes and using it to conv...

I'll make the 4th wall thing a running gag. Unless this is intentional and the way in which you want to tell the story, It's all intentional. I was trying to juxtapose Asuka's character development with the inclusion of something threatening the opposite. I'm trying to develop all these subplots sep...

Damn, this is easily my favorite story on gthe fan fiction stories. There were couple of times where you explicitly outlined emotions the audience could have inferred, but those would be nitpicks. This is great. Also props for taking an NGE style vision/dream esque detour. Ps: I've finished the ...

I know Asuka is a damaged teen, still I can't being myself to like her, more because of some Asuka fans that downplay her own wrongdoings, From what I've seen, nobody ahs said anything her wrongdoings, just provided context you've chosen to ignore. Off course, you have no issue considering context ...

Don't quote gob or me if you're addressing the OP. If you're addressing the OP, tag @ceasermagnus and unload on him/her. No? Look, I don't see inaction as a crime, if people blame Shinji too much regarding Asuka is because of his lack of action when no one notices that you can't make a non-action a ...

@gob hobblin Well written stories have universal appeal, irrelvant of how interesting the subject is. And it's not a lottery to write a well writeen, there's objective things like dialogoue, description, characterization, development, ect. that you can excel with irreleavnt of the premise. The threa...

I made a joke because it was an irrelevant and deflectionary question. You seem to have missed the joke so I poked you for it. Let’s get to the heart of this. First off, it’s not a “lottery”, it’s looking at the two stories, seeing what elements blend well and then approaching the story based on the...

Check out Bagheera's Ghosts of Evangelion . Read some of it, didn't really like it. I respect the insane amount of effort that probably went into it, but it wasn't really my cup of tea. I'm more abour relationships being used to develop characters, not using character development to develop a relat...

Because silvermoonlight challenged you to write a story . And I'm not obligated to accept that challenge because my own capacity to do so is irrelevant to my argument. Furthermore, even if I was capable of doing so, I'm not obligated to put my skills in a topic that doesn't interest me. All I argue...