My Evangelion story (Shinji/Rei)

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My Evangelion story (Shinji/Rei)

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Postby ninetyninenails » Sat Sep 23, 2006 11:53 pm

Well heres my story and it is a Shinji/Rei story so anyone that doesnt like the paring don't read


[url]http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3066957/1/[/url]
ShinjixRei ShinjixAsuka

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Postby ZaDiZTiK » Sat Nov 11, 2006 8:30 am

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I didn't have time to read your whole story. Sorry. I did however manage to read the first few chapters. I have to admit that you have potential. But FYI you might want to go over it again. No disrespect intended just constructive criticism. Your use of repetetive pronouns and misplacement of words in some chapters that might need rearragement throw your writing off a bit, not a lot mind you, but by enough. Overall it was really good, I really enjoyed reading it, thanks. I will finish what you wrote when I can and if you happen to write anymore please send it my way.
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