Well heres my story and it is a Shinji/Rei story so anyone that doesnt like the paring don't read
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My Evangelion story (Shinji/Rei)
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My Evangelion story (Shinji/Rei)
ShinjixRei ShinjixAsuka
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I didn't have time to read your whole story. Sorry. I did however manage to read the first few chapters. I have to admit that you have potential. But FYI you might want to go over it again. No disrespect intended just constructive criticism. Your use of repetetive pronouns and misplacement of words in some chapters that might need rearragement throw your writing off a bit, not a lot mind you, but by enough. Overall it was really good, I really enjoyed reading it, thanks. I will finish what you wrote when I can and if you happen to write anymore please send it my way.
I didn't have time to read your whole story. Sorry. I did however manage to read the first few chapters. I have to admit that you have potential. But FYI you might want to go over it again. No disrespect intended just constructive criticism. Your use of repetetive pronouns and misplacement of words in some chapters that might need rearragement throw your writing off a bit, not a lot mind you, but by enough. Overall it was really good, I really enjoyed reading it, thanks. I will finish what you wrote when I can and if you happen to write anymore please send it my way.
Mindless reflections of a day gone by,
Recollected upon only by the coming of a new dawn.
Recollected upon only by the coming of a new dawn.
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